During the cold winter pretty snows shine
Covers the ground with white very cold flake
When snow falls hard you can go out to sled
sometimes i would rather be in my bed
Before I sled I want to eat some cake
I eat then I get clothes without any whine
go out to sled and i know I'll be fine
under all my clothing my skin will bake
Especially under my hat, my head
I will not get to hot that I'd be dead
Sometimes I play fight with Daniel that's fake
Later that night, hungry we will go dine
When I am out sledding I wait in line
Am so nervous that my two legs will shake
Trash talk from kids older than I was said
Will go so fast on my plastic made sled
Trophy if real, I would go fast and take
Super star I will be, so fast I shine
So proud my friends will be waiting in line
I hope they are staying warm for their sake
hope they do not think I have some big head
other wise they might stab me with some lead
so far out that I sled atop a lake
it is frozen so I know I'll be fine
Ashley, your poem is very good! I like the rhyme scheme you used because it is very easy to follow. The iambic pentameter is evident and sounds really good!
ReplyDeleteOh ashley your poem is wonderful. The rhyme scheme is pretty unique.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done! Very creative with the word choice and the rhyme scheme.
ReplyDeleteHahaha I love your rhyme scheme. This is a very well well-thought out poem Ashley!
ReplyDeleteConstructive criticism is a good thing. You should work on your Iambic Pentameter. But, this poem was a good example of a Romanticism writing style and it has a good rhyme scheme. I can see the brotherly/sisterly love...
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